Today is the 8th of April and it is my birthday, I was just sitting at the table by myself while my friends were running around and screaming, i felt so lonely. Then i was given my cake, i felt so happy that i made a wish, but suddenly one of my friends came and blew out my candles, my tear started pouring down my face but i just had to wipe my tears because i didn't want to cry about it. Then my dad gave me a box, i opened it and there was a bright yellow bow, i didn't know what to do with it so i just put in back in the box and closed the lid. Next minute i saw my dad holding a cute juvenile puppy, it was the best surprise for my birthday, i held the cute puppy and he started licking my face with his wet sloppy tongue, i then smiled and my dad took our photo, our photo was framed and was put on the shelf. I named my puppy coco, everyday me and coco would measure our heights. I would always buy coco some toys to play with so he doesn't get bored at home. 12 years later.....I'm going to my soccer games which we were all sitting on the benches and our captain was picking who was going to play and i was the only one who she didn't pick, i felt left out.
Later that day i played soccer with coco. The next day at my soccer games we took a group photo and the photographer gave me the ball to hold and i was in the middle, but then some other girls in my soccer team snatched the ball of me and i just walked to the back and the photographer told me to smile and i got nervous but i smiled anyways and then they made fun of my braces and i felt embarrassed so i just ran home and laid on the couch and my coco came in and held my hand and then he laid on the floor, and he looked really sick so i got him some medication. 8 months later my dog is still sick and he was laying on the floor, i went up to him and noticed he wasn't feeling good so i yelled to my dad to come, he came and picked him up and we drove him to the vet. At the vet i patted him and gave him one last hug before i go, i also took the bow of his fur and i felt really sad he was leaving me, my dad gave me a hug and said ' everything's gonna be okay'. As my dad carried him away i waved coco goodbye and my tears started to pour down my face. 20 Years later....it was my niece's birthday and i was shocked that one of relatives got her a red bow just like what i got on my birthday, then my dad came in and he was holding a cute puppy and at that moment i felt happy, and he gave it to my niece and my niece was so happy. It brought back memories and i started crying but i was happy at the same time..
Hello my name is Hamid.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way how you wrote about happier and the way you did a lot of writing and it is really good writing the date in the story and may be next time you could write explane and tell us what happens to the other dog and bye have a good day good bye. I commitment on you blog when you were it a holiday trip to Simon bye.
Hey Hamid, Thank you for your feedback on my blog post, and next time i will try to write more information about other things that happen in the story.
ReplyDeleteThank you i really appreciated your feedback.